不知道自己写的这个英语句子对不对,求教.

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不知道自己写的这个英语句子对不对,求教.
我想表达的是,电灯泡的发明是历史里浓墨重彩的一笔,给世界已光亮,同时也催生了一个新的电子产业.
The invention of light bulb added a splendid stroke in the history,bringing light to every corner of the world,and,as well,provoked a nascent electric industry.

写得不错!建议你修复一下:"The invention of light bulb added a splendid [stroke=chapter] in the history,[bringing light to=lighting up] every corner of the world,and,[as well=at the same time同时] ,[it ...