帮我看看这篇英语作文有什么应该改进的地方.
帮我看看这篇英语作文有什么应该改进的地方.
My favourite book
A book is a good friend.I have many books and my favourite book is Andersen Fairy Tales.It was written by Hans Christian Andersen.Hans Christian Andersen was born in Denmark in 1805.He was interested in writing when he was young.He wrote 168 fairy tales at the age of 67.I like this book because the fairy tales which come from this book are very interesting.such as The Little Sea Maid,The Ugly Duckling,The Snow Queen.Thanks to Hans Christian Andersen,I have these good fairy tales that I can enjoy.
顺便帮我评下分 满分10分
when he was young 改成 since he is young.at the age of 67改成 by the age of 67.which come from this book are very interesting.改成in this book are very interesting.I have these good fairy tales that I...那个 是since he is young，不是应该是 since he was young?还有 可以评下分吗……因为他是名人嘛，他的事迹可以当做常识来看。而常识一般使用一般现在时。不过was也可以。8分吧，感觉有点中式英语。加油哦，有想学好的心的话一定会成功的。