请问如下短文能得多少分?有错的语法麻烦指出,
请问如下短文能得多少分?有错的语法麻烦指出,
Dear John,
Thank you for your letter asking about our discussion on low carbon lifestyle.Here is something about it.
From our discussion,we have realized important of low carbon lifestyle.At the end of the discussion,we offered four good ideas to keep low carbon.
First,we should use less water and electric,don't waste them.
Second,the rubbish should be put away.
Third,we should use less Tissues and we should handkerchiefs.
Finally,We can walk,ride or take a bus instead of drive a car.
If we do them,we can also live in the earth continue,and it will change the world more and more beautiful I think.
Best wishes,
Li
Dear John,
Thank you for your letter regarding our discussion on low-carbon lifestyles.Here is a basic summary of what we talked about:
After realizing the importance of a low-carbon lifestyle,we came up with four main methods to maintain low levels of carbon.
1.We should save water and electricity.
2.We should properly dispose of waste.
3.We should use less disposable products and more reusable ones,such as handkerchiefs instead of tissues.
4.Finally,we should reduce our use of private cars and opt instead for public transportation in order to reduce emissions and decrease traffic congestion.
If these four points are met,the Earth will be a better place for everyone to live in.Only by taking these steps can we ensure a greener,more beautiful Earth for the future.
我帮你加了不少内容,若需要翻译,
还有,handkerchiefs and tissues 这个例子不是很好；最好是plastic water bottles and reusable bottles 之类的对比.
:)