关于“我的中国梦”的英语作文,自己写的,看下哪个更好?有点急

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关于“我的中国梦”的英语作文,自己写的,看下哪个更好?有点急
这个也可写个人的梦想,本人水平有限,第二个词数不够,我不知道怎么继续写下去,如果有好的其他的题材也可以!提供个写作思路或者范文(从网上找的就算了),要至少60个单词,
1.Green dream
I have a dream is that our country becomes more beautiful.
The cities were around by green.
Hills covered by plants linked tightly.
The water is so transparent that we can see the fishes swimming.
People go to work by bikes,solar buses and subway.
No pollution.Everywhere expressions of gentle life and Laugher.
I hope my dream will be realized soon.
2.My dream
Everybody has his own dream.I have a ordinary dream:to be a pianist.
I like piano very much.I started learning playing the piano when I was six years old.
Pianists plays music beautifully.
Music can make people more pure and the soul more beautiful.
I believe my dream will come true.

你第一段的语法错误太多啊.给你几点建议1:通常情况一句话只能有一个动词,如果有两个要换成不定式或动名词,或者有连接词that which 等你那第一句话就不对,i have a dream is that .应该是 my dream is that 或者 i h...能不能帮忙修改一下Everybody has his own dream. I have got an ordinary dream: to become a pianist. I like the piano very much. I started learning the piano when I was six years old. Pianists play music beautifully.  Music can refine people purer and make our souls more beautiful. I believe my dream will come true.这个好改点,按你原文改的。 记得给分啊