英语比赛是自我介绍的问题
英语比赛是自我介绍的问题
我马上要参加一个英语比赛 之前要有自我介绍 我写了如下一段文章 ：
Good afternoon every body,Do you know jordan or Yao Ming?Do youu know what their jobs are?Yes,this is basketball ,It is also my favourite,Although I am a grade 9 student and I am 16 years old,I am crazy about it ,I have many other hobbies too ,such as playing computer,running and swimming.I am glad to join this half final,I believe I can go farther ,this is me---(我的名字） Thank you
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Good afternoon every body,Do you know jordan or Yao Ming?Do youu know what their jobs are?Yes,this is basketball ,It is also my favourite,Although I am a grade 9 student .I am crazy about it.Besides I have many other hobbies too ,such as playing computer,running swimming and so on.I am glad to join this half final,I believe I can go farther ,this is me---(我的名字） Thank you !
年龄就不要写了
因为你这篇文章不适合+年龄
有点不符合
如果你偏要+
那就+在Good afternoon every body,之后
旦旦但...
还是介意你不要+