英语好的兄弟帮我看看我作文``谢谢
问题描述：
英语好的兄弟帮我看看我作文``谢谢
文章:
l want to get good mark in this term.l know it is not very easy.
But l will be hard working.Now wo are in Grade3,we will graduate
from our school next year.This year like a battle,a battle which we can`t lose.So l will try my best to win the game.
l believe l can win the game.
What l have said today,
what l will do in the future.
有语法问题的话帮忙改下,提点意见也好``我会给分的
答
But l will be hard working.这一句不是很好,可以改为"I will be more hard working".更好.
Now wo are in Grade3,we will graduate .是we
win the game.既然你前面都说了battle,怎么又改成game 了呢?还是用战争比较好.
其他的还行,就是多加几句复合句会更好吧.