修改一篇英文小作文,是一篇很短的英语演讲稿因为需要一篇很短的英语演讲稿,我就搜索了一篇,但是好像有问题,很多地方读不通,不知道是原本就有问题还是我的水平有限判断错误.如能指出错误并改正者,可以继续加高分.认真修改者奖励200分Ladies and Gentlemen,Good afternoon!As we all know,in 2008 Beijing Olympic Games will be held,every person are eagerly looking forward to its arrival,carefully exploring the life of the details,we can easily see that the Olympic spirit is everywhere.Between neighbors,we help each other; colleagues,in addition to competition,everyone has eve

As we all know, the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games are on its way, everyone is eagerly looking forward to its arrival. If we carefully explore our daily life, we can find out that the Olympic spirit is everywhere.
In the neighborhood, we help each other; in our working place, apart from competition, everyone has put priority to friendship . Everyone has initiated himself to the protection of the surrounding environment. The Olympic atmosphere is hot in my hometown. parents have paid attention to the message of the Olympic Games, all those who are around me talk about the various stories related to the Olympic Games from time to time.
Everyone has his own expectations of the Olympic Games , and I also believe that China will certainly be able to better organize the Olympic Games and win honor for our country ！
I am proud of being a Chinese. I hope my country to be much stronger. I look forward to 2008, I will announce to the world aloud: Welcome to Beijing.
Let’s pray for the Olympic Games 2008 in Beijing
That's all. Thanks for your listening.

Ladies and Gentlemen,
Good afternoon!
As we all know,the Beijing Olympic Games will be held in 2008 , everybody is eagerly looking forward to its arrival, carefully exploring the life of the details, we can easily see that the Olympic spirit is everywhere.
Among neighbors, we help each other; colleagues, in addition to competition, everyone has even more made on the friendship of the first. Everyone should protect the environment around us. Olympic atmosphere is diffuse in my home, parents have paid attention from to the message of the Olympic Games, all brothers and sisters from time to time talk about the various of stories related to the Olympic Games.
people who take part in the Olympic Games have their own expectations, and I also believe that China will successfully organize the Olympic Games and athelets will win honor for our country ！
I am proud of being a Chinese. I hope my country will be stronger and stronger. I look forward to 2008, I will say to the world loudly: Welcome to Beijing.
best wishes for the Olympic Games of 2008 in Beijing
That's all. Thanks for your listening.

楼主,恕我直言,文章语法错误和用词错误比较多,我本来打算把每个修改的地方再复述下错误原因等,但我发现太多了.我大概谈下主要错误吧
1.句子成分问题,每个句子只能有一个谓语动词,连接2个句子用连词,若并列关系还可以用分号.在句子成分这个方面,楼主问题最多
2.用代词指代everyone, every body的所属格时,用 his or her 或者 his/her ,不能用its
3.先问好,再说ladies and gengtle,习惯问题
4.注意谓语动词单复数形式
5.Olympic Games 不加冠词 the
以下我修改好了的,你自己看吧
Good afternoon,Ladies and Gentlemen!
As we all know, Beijing will hold Olympic Games in 2008, and everybody is eager to look forward to it. Carefully observing the life in detail, we can easily see that the Olympic spirit is pervasive.
Neighbors help each other; colleagues, in spite of competition, are aware that the friendship comes first. Everyone has started to protect his or her surrounding environment. Olympic atmosphere is diffused to my home as well----parents pay great attention to the information of the Olympic Games, and all brothers and sisters take turns to talk about the various stories related to Olympic Games.
Everyone has his or her own expectation about Olympic Games, and I also believe that China will certainly be able to better organize Olympic Games and win honor for our country !
I am proud of being a Chinese. I hope my country to be much stronger. I look forward to 2008, and I will say to the world aloud: Welcome to Beijing.
Good Luck to 2008 Beijing Olympic Games
That's all. Thanks for your listening.

Ladies and Gentlemen,
Good afternoon!
As it’s known to all, the Beijing Olympic Games will be held in 2008. We are all eagerly looking forward to its arrival. Looking into the life itself, we can easily understand that the Olympic spirit is everywhere.
As neighbors, we help each other. As colleagues, in addition to competition, we take friendship as the most important thing. We try to protect the environment around us. The atmosphere of Olympic Games is spreading in my hometown. People around begin to put more attention on the messages of the Olympic Games, and talk about the various stories related to it.
People who take part in the Olympic Games have their own expectations. I believe that China will organize the Olympic Games perfectly, and the athletes of the country will win great honor for their motherland.
I am proud of being a Chinese. I hope that my country will be stronger and stronger. I am looking forward to the 2008 as I will say loudly to the world: Welcome to Beijing.
Best wishes for the Olympic Games of 2008 in Beijing.
Thanks for your listening!