请懂英文商务信函书写格式的高手请进 帮我检查下我的信函作业有没有错 谢谢

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请懂英文商务信函书写格式的高手请进 帮我检查下我的信函作业有没有错 谢谢
第一部分是我的信封内容:
AllenHaiLin
AmoyInternationalTradingCo. Ltd
1 Binhai Road Xiamen,Fujian,361000(我不确定这个邮政编码要不要写)
Thepeople's*
Mr.John smith
Midland CarpetCo. Ltd
173 Waterloo Street ,London E.C.4
TheUnitedKingdom
第二部分是信的内容:
AmoyInternationalTradingCo. Ltd
1BinhaiRoad , Xiamen ,Fujian
Thepeople'sRepublicofChina
Tel:(0592) 500 0000Tax:(0592) 5000001PostalCode:361000
Novermber 16,2011
Mr .John Smith
MidlandCarpetCo. Ltd
173 Waterloo Street
London E.C.4.
TheUnitedKingdom
Dear. Mr John:
I havenoticedyouradvertisementintheNovermber10 issueofTHEMAGICCARPETmagazine.We wouldliketofindoutdetailedinformationsaboutthevarioustypes ,specificationandprices ,samplecuttingsbecausewethinkthepatternsmightbeappealtoourcustomers ,especiallytheyoungers .
WearereadytolayinastockforNewYearsales , it wouldbehelpfulifyoucouldsupplyabooklet , welookforwardtoreceivingyourreplyinaweek.
Yoursfaithfully ,
AllenHaiLin
Bussiness Manager

兄弟,人叫John Smith,你可以称呼人家Dear Mr.Smith,或者Dear John
Dear Mr.Smith,
We were much impressed by your advertisement on the MAGIC CARPET magazine.Your wonderful design will be very popular among young people in my country according to our experience.Would you pls kindly offer your specs with best prices and samples?
We are ready to put these into the coming New Year market if your products and prices are proved satisfactory.Hoping that this will meet your prompt attention and awaiting to receive your catalogue.
Yours faithfully ,
Allen Hai Lin
Bussiness Manager
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