《Travel by plane》
《Travel by plane》
As far as we know,traveling by plane is very enjoyable and fantastic,but it is a little expensive and dangerous,Someone maybe afraid of by plane,they feel scard when they are in the sky,because it is too high.But from my point of view,I like traveling by plane,because it make me feel comfortable and relaxing.Can you image that when you look out the window,the sky is beautiful,it as blue as sea.The cloud is as white as milk,very lovely .Sometimes you can see birds flying in the sky.How beautiful the view is!What a amazing traveling!That's why I like traveling by plane,it is my favourite trasport.
批改方式：复制一遍并且在错误的地方的后面打括号,括号里面写纠正的东西
第二行Some people maybeafraidoftraveling by plane.
someone变成 some people
maybe分开写
of by plane 是不可以的, 可以是 of traveling by plane 或of taking the plane
第三行 because itmakesmemake 用第三人称单数
第四行and relaxed. 感觉放松的 relaxed, relaxing 是（某物）使人放松的
Can you image.这句话,像下面这样改,可能会更优美：
Try to imagine this,when you look out of the window, you can see the beautiful sky in touching distance, it is as blue as the sea, and the clouds are as white as milk. How lovely it is!
第六行Whatanamazingway oftraveling!
最后一句话 It's my favorite transportation.