帮我看看这篇英语自我介绍有没有错误!good morning every body I am very glad to introduce myself to all of you .my name is liruixian.I am 16.I come from No.2 Middle scool.it is no doubt that I am happy to be a member of No.1 Middle School.I am only daughter in my family I like listening to music in my free time.It is true that I dislike reading books .I like green and I like watching anime my favorite is death note .tell you a secret,my birthday is Bachelor's day It is e
帮我看看这篇英语自我介绍有没有错误!
good morning every body I am very glad to introduce myself to all of you .
my name is liruixian.I am 16.I come from No.2 Middle scool.it is no doubt that I am happy to be a member of No.1 Middle School.
I am only daughter in my family I like listening to music in my free time.It is true that I dislike reading books .I like green and I like watching anime my favorite is death note .tell you a secret,my birthday is Bachelor's day It is easy to remember,isn't is
that's all thanks for listening!
写得很好，只有一点点小小的建议
第一行 very 换成 so ，不是very错误，而是用so更好
第四行 only 前面加定冠词 the ，唯一表示特指
family 后面加 and 并列两句话
正确
Good morning every body ！
I am very glad to introduce myself to all of you .
My name is liruixian. I am 16. I come from No.2 Middle scool. It is no doubt that I am happy to be a member of No.1 Middle School.
I am (the) only daughter(child)(你是独生子女，还是独生女，有兄弟姐妹）in my family I like listening to music in my free time. It is true that I（do not like）reading books. I like green and I like watching anime, and my favorite is "Death Note". Tell you a secret. My birthday is (on) Bachelor's day It is easy to remember, isn't is ?
That's all！ Thanks for listening！
看了一遍，有一个地方不对： only daughter 前应该加定冠词the 。真的很好…
先说拼写,或者打字错误：school animal
然后应该用there is no doubt that
还有,应该用the only daughter,因为独一无二,就你一个.
还有,光棍节能这样说么?总感觉很有chinglish的意思.
最后,anime 意思是 日本低俗动画片?换个词吧,cartoons.