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雅思作文修改～
Some people believe that scientific research should be conducted by the government instead of private companies.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the rapid development of science and technology,the scientific research has bacome a gradually important issue.However,whether it should be conducted by the government or by the private companies forms a disputed topic.In my opinion,both of them take up different advantages.
Conducting the scientific reseach needs not only a great deal of maney,but also a group of people with professional knowledge and high level of intelligence.From my point of view,companies and the government can both reach this standard,while the scientific research is not easy to be conducted.
In the one hand,companies do experiments only in order to make more profits from improving their products,caring nothing about the development of the country.For instance,a beverage company will never try utmost to research nuclear,vice versa.A deep gap can be seen between the research of the government and private companies.
In the other hand,private companies still have some connections with the government in the aspect of pollution.The paper manufacturers are good example.Every day the waste from the factories is dumped into nearby rivers is one of the root causes of environmental pollution.Due to the waste coming from private companies,companies should be responsible for cleaning the polluted rivers.Meanwhile,companies should do some researches to prevent rivers from being polluted by the waste.
To sum up,the scientific research can be conducted by the government and private companies seperately.If both of them can join hands in conducting the research and solving the problems,maybe the progress of development will be more rapid.（希望能给我打个分数 然后详细的说说我的缺点不足的地方 好的话 我会加分给你的!）