Fish are beautiful and people love them.改错hereFish are beautiful and people love them.Raise should be kept in a glass container where contains water and a layer of sands.Water plants should be put in it.When winter came ,the container should be put where is warm.The water should be kept at a temperature of 20.The fish should be fed on regularly every day so the water should be changed once a week.With doing so,people become patient and get into a good

in a glass container where contains water and a layer of sands 这里where 改成which
The fish should be fed on regularly every day so the water should be changed once a week. 这句的so改成and
people become patient and get into a good habit of keeping regularly hours.
become改成became
regularly 改成regular
有多少个错？我粗略看了下就这几个比较明显

按顺序修改如下：
1、Fish (is) beautiful...
2, (Raising) should be kept...
3.in a glass container(which)contains water and ..
4. and a layer of (sand)
5. (Watering) plants should be put in it.
6.When winter (comes),
7.The fish should be fed on 的on去掉
8.（and)the water should be changed once a week.
9. people(will become)patient and get into...
10. a good habit of keep(regular)hours.

1、Fish (is) beautiful...2,(Fish) should be3.(raised )in a glass container 4.in a glass container(which)contains water and ..5.and a layer of (sand)6.When winter (comes),7.The fish should be fed on 的...

Fish should be raised in a glass container which contains water and a layer of sand. 4处
When winter comes ,the container should be put where is warm. 1处
The fish should be fed regularly every day ,and the water should be changed once a week.2处
Doing so,people will become patient and get into a good habit of keeping regular hours.3处