能改的更诗意肉麻恶心点就太好啦~When the sun rises up from the sea horizon,the warm orange sunshine go through the glass of the wide folding door,the entire room is colored up into a cozy mood.It is so warm and comfortable,that you feel like you can just stay in this house forever.Raining and cloudy is the most common weather in vancouver,my concept is to make a warm and cozy home that provides people a comfortable shelter from the weather.Warm color wall covering,th

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能改的更诗意肉麻恶心点就太好啦~
When the sun rises up from the sea horizon,the warm orange sunshine go through the glass of the wide folding door,the entire room is colored up into a cozy mood.It is so warm and comfortable,that you feel like you can just stay in this house forever.
Raining and cloudy is the most common weather in vancouver,my concept is to make a warm and cozy home that provides people a comfortable shelter from the weather.Warm color wall covering,thick furry carpet and the puffy soft cushions on the couch make you feel so warm and cozy that you can just forget the bad weather outside.

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