急 在线等!英语! 很短大家看看!语法检查给大使馆的信 大家给看看有没有语法错误或拼写错误 或者有什么不妥的地方例如委婉语气什么的... 谢谢各位了!Dear Officer:This letter about my application for a Cannada Study Permit.My name is ****. File No.:*****. I have received the letter of request to submit CAQ from you.New CAQ is handling, but it may takes time.I have submitted the CAQ when I delivered the application material . I hope you don’t mind my asking, but I wonder if you could look up one time.I hope to hear from you

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急 在线等!英语! 很短大家看看!语法检查
给大使馆的信 大家给看看有没有语法错误或拼写错误 或者有什么不妥的地方例如委婉语气什么的... 谢谢各位了!
Dear Officer:
This letter about my application for a Cannada Study Permit.
My name is ****. File No.:*****. I have received the letter of request to submit CAQ from you.New CAQ is handling, but it may takes time.
I have submitted the CAQ when I delivered the application material . I hope you don’t mind my asking, but I wonder if you could look up one time.I hope to hear from you soon.
Yours truly,
***
中文
尊敬的签证官你好!

我叫**,档案号:+++ 收到贵处的信要求提交CAQ,新的CAQ正在办理但可能需要时间。
在递交材料时我把CAQ也一起递交上去了。希望您能再查阅一下。
就是说我的CAQ已经寄给大使馆了 但他们说没有 要我补一份 我想让他再查一下

错误太多.

不是打击你,但签证官一般不会理会这类邮件。

This letter about my application for a Cannada Study Permit. 在this后面要加is的,不然该句无谓语。
I have received the letter of request to submit CAQ from you应改为 I have received the letter of the request to submit CAQ for you 该句出现了冠词缺失和介词使用的错误。
I hope you don’t mind my asking, but I wonder if you could look up one time.I hope to hear from you soon. 这两句确实不太委婉,总感觉有点指责对方不看你CAQ的意思,可以改成I will appriciate you if you can have an eye on my material.I'm looking forward to your reply.

这封信不行的,不仅仅是语法问题
劝你好好咨询一下再重写一封

Dear officer,I am XX,file No.XX.I have received a letter requesting to submit an CAQ.I thought I had submit the CAQ together with my application,so it would be very nice if you kindly double check my ...

我建议你把中文给出来,然后找高手给你写一下,因为你的这封信投上去,估计英语水平就露馅了