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Fashion Pursuit in Colleges
Nowadays,there is a trend which is a undeniable fact on the campus that,more and more students are pursuiting fashion.Wearing characteristic clothes is getting prevailing among the youth.Other fashional things such as hair-dyeing,rings are also can be seen.
Many people hold the points that pursuiting fashion does no harm to there young men.They do have the flexible choices on what they wear or how they behave.Pursuiting fashion can also be looked as a pioneering spirit which shows the energy and the open-mind thoughts of the youth.
But on the contrary,there are also some people have the opposite idea that,pursuiting fashion is wasting time.They think that the colleges students should put the study and courses on the top of their agenda.Studying hard is the only imperative for the student and pour efforts into these fashional things is meaningless and worthless.
As far as I concerned,it is meaningless to compete with other people for pursuiting fashion.But dressing yourself property is also necessary because it does make you charming.