我写了一篇英语作文,My Best FriendI have many friend,among them,my best friend is my monitor-Tony.He looks like a famous singer and he is also very handsome.He is a hard-working student.We are good at different subjects on study.So sometimes we talk over the problems.He is always ready to help others and try his best to help the classmates when they're in trouble.Therefore,I think of he is a kind and honest person.I with to keep the friendship between Tony and

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My Best Friend
I have many friends, among them, my best friend is my monitor-Tony， a famous singer .Tony is also very handsome. He is a hard-working student. We are good at different subjects on study and we talk over the problems sometimes. He is always ready to help others and try his best to help the classmates when they're in trouble. Therefore, I think of he is a kind and honest person and could be a good friend. I‘d like to keep the friendship between Tony and I forever.

I have many friend中friend加s
He is always ready to help others and try his best to help the classmates when they're in trouble. 中try应用三单,tries.
I think of he is a kind and honest person. 把of改为that
I with to keep the friendship between Tony and I forever. with改为wish
另外把Tony and I 改为tony and me岂不更好?
文中运用衔接词较好.若注意细节,你的文中应该会更成功!

I have many (friends), among them, Tony my class monitor is my best friend. He looks like a famous singer and he is also very handsome. He is a hard-working student. We are both good at different subjests. So sometimes we talk about the problems( we have). He is always ready to help others and try his best to help his classmates when they are in trouble. Therefore, I think he is a kind and honest person. I hope I can keep the friendship with Tony forever.或；I hope our friendship will last forever.
你的作文写得很好呀，没有改动多少地方