个人简历－英语问题!RESUMEI once have traveled to *, deeply in love with the city *.* is an open international city, and the University of * is the best university in *. I choose the University of *, because the University of * uses international education concepts and advanced methods of management, it is consistent with my concepts in my heart and will be to benefit me greatly in the future.I would like

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I once have traveled to *, deeply in love with the city *.
* is an open international city, and the University of * is the best university in *. I choose the University of *, because the University of * uses international education concepts and advanced methods of management, it is consistent with my concepts in my heart and will be to benefit me greatly in the future.
I would like to engage in economic and financial professional. Under the environment of international financial crisis, engaging in the profession maybe have a certain degree of risk, but I am confident that through my efforts I can make a difference and own myself achievement enterprise space.
I am always excellent both in character and scholarship , with the outstanding behaviour in school, so I serve as one of the class leaders for a long time, and repeatedly have been rated as outstanding class cadres, Miyoshi students and excellent students. Specially, it was tripe-A student of Fujian Province that I was evaluated as in my third year of high school.
My interest is widespread, I have a strong curiosity to many things and the courage to explore. I love the society, and I’m good at communication, so I think that the teaching patterns of the University of * is a great advantage to me.
I sincerely hope that the University of * can give serious consideration to my application, and can give me the study opportunity.
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