Here is my Short essay,Please tell me what is the wrong about it.Thank you~我有一个梦想在我10岁时,就认识了美国鼎鼎大名的皮货商人皮塞罗,他告诉我人活着就一定要有自己的梦想.他一边笑着,一边让我眺望那片蔚蓝天空,并说道:"美好总是那么遥远,但是只要我们能够看见它,就一定会有实现的那么一天." 我瞪大了双眼,这场景时至今日都不能忘记.ONE DREAMwhen i was ten years old I had knew pisailuo who was the famous furrier in USA.He told me that one person would be have a dream in its lastlife .he smiled and I was told to survey the blue sky."The nice things always far away from us,but we
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Here is my Short essay,Please tell me what is the wrong about it.Thank you~
我有一个梦想
在我10岁时,就认识了美国鼎鼎大名的皮货商人皮塞罗,他告诉我人活着就一定要有自己的梦想.他一边笑着,一边让我眺望那片蔚蓝天空,并说道:"美好总是那么遥远,但是只要我们能够看见它,就一定会有实现的那么一天." 我瞪大了双眼,这场景时至今日都不能忘记.
ONE DREAM
when i was ten years old I had knew pisailuo who was the famous furrier in USA.He told me that one person would be have a dream in its lastlife .he smiled and I was told to survey the blue sky."The nice things always far away from us,but we could see it ,and that must be come true one day " he said.i Stared so big eyes that i couldn't forgot the Scene untill today .
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