求帮忙改第一次写的托福作文.

求帮忙改第一次写的托福作文.
it more important to understanding ideas and concepts than learning affect?内容如下：
Students always feel conflict on the fundamental issue such as whether to stress more importance on ideas or concepts understanding or facts learning in their daily study life.However,it is obvious that we should take the balance between the two basic parts,for ideas and concepts work together with facts to promote each other,making the process of learning more efficient.
Firstly,understanding of ideas and concepts make facts you take for granted learning more comprehensive.Something may get clear in students’ mind suddenly after they have learned a key concept or idea.For instance,when I was on kindergarten,I knew that climate across our motherland are quite different from region to region,but it is just a common sense because I had visited to mountains and rivers all over China with my parents and the fluctuation of climate was just what I experienced myself.However,as I grow up and went to middle high school,I learn the climate in
geography class.I began to know that many factors influence climate in an area,making it quite various from each other,for example,altitude,monsoon,distance from sea,and so forth.Soon,it stroke to my mind that it is the reason why I can experience the different climate at the same time as I traveled across the extensive land.
Secondly,facts often take important role to help ideas and concepts understood more easily.When students learn foot in the door effect and prizing low effect in social psychology class,they may be confusing about the two strategies for their definition in textbook is similar.Both of the concepts begin with a minor expense.However,when teachers remind students of salesmen’s strategies in daily life,the two confusing concepts become understood and distinguished.Most of us have following experience,when somebody ask us to do a great favor for him or her,we may reject as the concerning of expense of us own.However,if we have receipted a minor requirement,the same favor that has been rejected before seems to be acceptable.That is what
so_called foot in the door effect.As to prizing low effect,it is even more common than the precious one.If you decide to buy something for its’ low prize and then find there is much additional expense,I’m sorry to tell you that you are cheated by the strategy of prizing low.
As you see,concepts and ideas understanding and the learning of facts do promote each other as students try to grasp new knowledge.If we combine facts with abstract ideas and concepts,it is much easier for us to learn both of them.