帮我改一下这篇托福口语第一题的语法错误

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帮我改一下这篇托福口语第一题的语法错误
well,Zhenghua shopping center is my pavorite place.
first,my home is near this shopping center.i walk there just need 10 minutes.but if i go anther place to shop,i have to drive my car cause this place is far away from my home,with the bad trafficondition,it will takes me 1 hour to there.it's terrible!so shopping in the Zhuanghua will save me much time.
what's more,Zhuanghua shopping center is always discount.if i buy a t shirt in anther place,it may charge 100 dollars,but in Zhenghua,just 50 dollars i can take it home.you konw i am a student,i have no independent source of income,my bill gonna kill me if i shopping in anther place,but in zhanghua,i won't run out of my budget.
that's why i like this place to shop for clothes.

额……我口语23说点意见啊,虽然不高,但是我觉着托福口语只要有逻辑,发音清晰,就能拿到22左右的分数,对于中国人也凑合了吧所以啊,你这个逻辑也有问题,虽然我觉着模版不是好东西,但是一点规矩都没有也不好啊第一个没问...