我得讲一篇短文改错,但是我的英语水平很烂,改时写清为什么吧,最好详细点,

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我得讲一篇短文改错,但是我的英语水平很烂,改时写清为什么吧,最好详细点,
I have been play piano for four years.Last year when i heard the news which there was going to be a piano performance came up in a few weeks,I felt very nervous.Finally came that day.when we arrived at the concert hall,my hand started shaking expectedly.However,just looking at my teacher's warm face let him get back self-confidence.When it was my turn to perform,I go up the stage and played the piece from beginning to an end pleasantly.Soon,the cheers filled the concert hall.I felt very happy and very proud myself.That is my first piano performance,but I will never forget it for the rest of my life.
一共有十处错误,每句话不超过两处.

1.I have been playing
have been doing sth 是现在完成进行时
(不是I have been played,这是我被耍了的意思好吗...-_-||)
2.the news that
that 作为连词
3.performance coming up
coming up 是后置定语
4.my hands
改成复数
(这我不太确定有没有那么容易...)
5.let me
句子的主语是我,me
6.I went up
go 的过去式动词 went
7.the end
那首曲子的结尾,应该要是the
8.proud of
固定用语proud + of
9.That was
is 的过去式 was
10.and I will
but 是转折介词,在这里和前后句子的含义有矛盾,因此用and替代.
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