以My Best Way of Going to School为题写一篇英语短文,词数不少于60
以My Best Way of Going to School为题写一篇英语短文,词数不少于60
My Best Way of Going to School作者:jbbujun 时间:2008-08-14 状态:已批改 点击数:934
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习作原文 My house is a little far from my school, so I always go to school by bus. But now, I try to ride my bike to school. Here's the reason.
First because of the crowded traffic, the bus usually very slowly. Sometimes they even more slowly than bikes. Second I won't be late for school.Third I could take exercise every day.
Those are why I ride my bike to school.
批 改 老 师zhanglaoshi评 分78分级 别优良批 改1.文中作者介绍骑车的理由清晰,合理。不过列举理由的时候应该使用 firstly ,secondly ,thirdly来表示第一,第二,第三;
同时他们的后面该用逗号。
2.由于作者列举骑车的理由不止一个,所以 Here's the reason 应该是Here are the reasonas
3 句子.because of the crowded traffic, the bus usually runs very slowly.中缺少动词,应该加上runs或goes
4.Sometimes they runeven more slowly than bikes. 也缺少谓语动词,所以应该加上run
5.Third I could take exercise every day. 建议改成 Third I can take exercise by bike every day.
希望作者在遣词造句方面多下些功夫。同时注意句子的结构。避免中式英语的出现,缺乏谓语动词。
My Best Way of Going to School
Comparing with other ways of going school,I enjoy riding a bike best.
First of all,I can make more exersise during my way to school.Then,the
fresh air make me be comfortable all day.The most inportant is I can go with my classmates,we talk and laugh.
What a exciting way of going school! I enjoy it!
Hello everybody!I'll tell you about my best way of going to school.I always go to school by bike,because I think it is good for my health,we all know that ride bike can help you do some exercise of your legs.when I go to school by bike ,I can see the blue sky ,and in that time,I think everything is beautiful.It makes me believe tommorrow will be better.ok,that's my go to school by bike's reason,what is you best way of going to school ?Can you tell me?
My Best Way of Going to School
I usually go to school by bus.I like that.It is really relaxing.Here are the reasons.First,my house is far from my school.Second,I can get good view of the city.Third,goning to school by bus is more comfortable than riding a bike.And the most important thing is I can't ride a bike.So I usually go to school by bus.