请各位帮我看看有没有语法问题

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请各位帮我看看有没有语法问题

Seventeen-year-old Isabella Swan moved to Forks to live with her father,Charlie,after her mother remarried a baseball player.She was quickly befriended by many students at her new high school.Bella sat next to Edward Cullen in biology class on her first day of school.He appeared to be disgusted with her,much to Bella’s confusion.A few days later,Bella was nearly struck by a van in the school parking lot(停车场).Edward moved the van easily from some feet away and stopped it with his hand.He later refused to explain this act to Bella and warned her against befriending him.Then Bella fell in love with(爱上了···) Edward Cullen and wanted to be with him forever,so she asked Edward to change her.But Edward refused to do that.Because of Bella’s good smell,a vampire who named James wanted to kill her and drank her blood.In order to protect Bella,the Cullen Family made a plan to kill James.Unfortunately,the plan did not work and Bella decided to face(vt.) James alone because she thought her mother was caught by James and she did not want the Cullens to be hurt.She was almost died but finally was saved by the Cullen Family.•Twilight is a really wonderful novel.You can enjoy the romantic mystery between a human and a vampire.

我认为 She was quickly befriended by many students at her new high school应改为She made friends with many students at her new high school soon.James alone改为James felt lonely