谁能帮我看一下我写的这篇雅思作文能有几分?

谁能帮我看一下我写的这篇雅思作文能有几分?
The university should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give students more practical training. Do you agree or disagree?
　　In modern society, more and more people think that the university should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give students more practical training. However there’s also a lot of people do not agree with them. In my opinion, the university provide student more practical training is very necessary.
　　First, when people come to university, most of them is more than 18 years old, so they have ability to teach-self. That means student can learn theoretical knowledge mainly by self-teaching rather than by lessons.
　　Second, in modern society, the practical ability is becoming more and more important. But in school, students rarely have chance to practice themselves. The most of their life is compare with lots of books rather than practical training. Therefore when graduating from university, many students find them can not adapt social working requirement. That makes them frustrated. If this situation happens, it’ll be the failure of high education of the university.
　　Third, the target of high education is to bring up person with ability for society. The ability can be understood in two points: one is theoretical ability, the other is practical ability. As a result, the practical training is also a very import part in high education. Many universities gradually know that practical training is necessary but most of universities do not make enough effort or even give enough attention to this main task. Thus they could not really complete their duty.
　　So I agree that should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give students more practical training.
这篇作文是我自己写的,上次拿到雅思救星上请老师批改,老师给了我5.0分,大家觉得雅思救星的老师给我5.0分合适吗?