帮我改一下英语作文,3Q
帮我改一下英语作文,3Q
Busy this word can descibe almost everyone's winter holiday.During the winter holiday there is a very important festival--spring festival.It is a traditional Chinese festival.At that time ,everyone went back to their hometown and had a get-together with their relatives.But some people were really busy so they couldn't went back to home ,that they will send a postcard or make a phone call to their parents or children.And it will be the most warm gift to warm their relatives' heart.This wavation for me wasn't a relaxing vacation.Because I was busy doing my homework having a get-together.But only one day I felt relaxing.Why is that?Because that day was spring festival my mother told me:You can do your homework tomorrow.So this day for me is relaxing that I watched TV late and played computer games.At night we turned on all lights in my house and make the house bright.That means we will have a bright year.At 12 o' clock my father and I played firework.At the moment,the dark sky became colorful and beautiful.The voice was reallyloud and this city--wenzhou will become more powerful in cow year.The city was full of red.Red just like fire.Our life will like fire.顺便去个题目a spring festival
1.牛年不叫cow year!太雷人了……是叫Year of the ox.
2.最后,放烟花怎么和城市连到一块儿呢?逻辑上需要修改.最后一句全城市都红了,像火一样?啥意思?怪怪的.我就改成你最后放烟火许愿了.你看成不成.
3.你这篇究竟想写你的假期还是写你的春节呢?
4.你没有说字数要求,我改完之后大概也是190多个单词.估计你要求是200词吧.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival for the Chinese people and is when all family members get together,just like Christmas in the West.All people go back to their hometown and enjoy family reunion with their relatives.But for those who are too busy to return home,they will send a postcard or make a phone call to their parents or children.
For me,this vacation was not relaxing at all.I was busy doing my homework.Besides,I had to visit many relatives with my parents.The only day when I felt relaxed was exactly the Spring Festival when my mom told me that I did not have to do homework.So I watched TV and played computer games.At night we turned on all lights and the house was really bright.It means that we will have a bright year.At 12 o' clock my father and I played firework.The dark sky became colorful and beautiful.At that moment,I made a wish that this city --- Wenzhou will become more powerful in Year of the ox and my family will be happy in this coming year!