求英语大神来帮我看看我的这两句句子语法上有没有错误,能帮我美化一下更好,

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求英语大神来帮我看看我的这两句句子语法上有没有错误,能帮我美化一下更好,
It is relaxing to enjoy the sweet music when you are reading a book.in a pleasant weather.
If you want to live a more enjoyable life ,the first point ,you must find a great job.

第一句还ok吧
If you want to live a more enjoybale life,the first thing is that you must find a great job.