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帮我看看我刚写的这篇文章有没有错?明天用
Today I will talk about some of a coach,his name is PhilJackson.
He was born in 1945.And he is 203cm.He was coach Los Angeles Lakers.He ever coached Chicago Bulls.He was AIR MICHAEL JORDAN's Mentor.He also was a basketball palyer when he was young.He was in 1967 2nd turn of 17th is selected by the New York Knicks team; On June 8,1978 he was exchanged the New Jersey net team.

菲尔.杰克逊很伟大,但是你要重点说他培养出的两大巨星,乔丹和科比,以及风靡世界的三角进攻战术.至于他是第二轮第几顺位被选中,由纽约尼克斯交易到新泽西网队,这都不重要.
today i'll talk about PhilJackson.He is a world famous coach ,and have won nine champions in NBA.He trained two superstars,jordan and kobe,which are all symbols of NBA.
He designed and developed triangle tactics,which is a well known skill for basketball players.Now he works as a coach in Lakers,and strives for the tenth champion in his life.