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My mather
My mother is a shop assistant,she is 34 years old.She's neme is Sun Huanxia.She has two big eyes,a small nose,a small mouth and long black hair.She favourite food is noodles,and she favourite fruit is apples.She likes playing computer games with me.She helps me and I help her,too.I like her very much.
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My mother
My mother is a shop assistant,she is 34 years old.She's neme is Sun Huanxia.She has two big eyes,a small nose,a small mouth and long black hair.She favourite food is noodles,and she favourite fruit is apples.She likes playing computer games with me.She helps me and I help her,too.I like her very much.