my vacation写英语作文 ING的形式 要求配中文.哪位大大给写下

声明：我即将进入高中。我也就写个世博会吧。
My vacation
During my vacation,I went to World Expo with my family. While visiting the hall , we fell in with a group of foreign friends.And we talked happily with a volunteer's help.Then we were interested a lot by some fun inventions.In a word,we had a good time in Shanghai,I hope I can spend vacation here once more.
我的假日
在我的假日期间，我和家人一起去参观了世博。当我们在参观世博园区的时候邂逅了一群外国友人，并且在志愿者的帮助下我们开始了愉快的交流.随之我们又被一些好玩的发明所吸引.总之，我们在上海博度过了一个快乐的假期，我希望还能再次来到这儿度假.
真的写得很浅显了..初一...貌似是不像...我们初三的时候全是火拼生僻语法..

My Vacation
My vacation was very fun.I went to World Expo.There were many interesting building about China,Amrica and France.The Chinese building is tall.And I enjoyed beautiful things.I thought my vacation was very substantial.